Formal letter

Dear Mr. Zefferelli,

Out of coincidence, I have found the filmed masterpiece of Romeo and Juliet which was written by me. Not only was it filmed, but you also added a vocal, Leonardo, into it. I appreciate that you take favor in my pieces, yet I am very intrigued in this decision that you made. You set the stage in a majestic palace, the home of the Capulets. Here, you add in a significant amount of vocals sung by Leonardo. After replaying the verse a couple of times, I have noticed that it foreshadowed my plot and the deadly fate of Romeo and Juliet. Not only did it hint the plot, it revealed it vulnerable and naked without any riddles to cover it. This I disapprove. The catharsis that is supposed to build up is now torn down. A deep contrast occurred when Leonardo appeared with his melancholy melody in the middle of the lively party. The sad melody at the center of attention, the passionate lovers melting into each other in the corner. It was well used to distracting the guests' attention, though.
Mr. Zefferelli, you made a magnificent image out of the ballroom party scene. How Romeo roughly and eagerly grabbed Juliet's hand, and the frightened reaction that morphed to loving through their conversation. Oh the riddles between the pilgrim and the saint, trying to outsmart each other. If only Romeo wasn't as reckless. He could have been more mature while still having his teenager characteristics. I have to say, the group dance was extremely well thought out. The chance of dancing and interacting with each other lit up the match of lust yet they had to hold it back for their public image. The indecisive and wild hearts of young boys and girls. Their reluctance to parting could be clearly seen as Romeo and Juliet do all they can to tear their eyes off of each other. The newly burned firewood crackling with eagerness not even close to dying ashes.
The scene where Romeo and Juliet stabilize clarify their feelings at the orchard was filmed a little too awkwardly. Romeo didn't seem like an elegant lover, but a crazed monkey that had not been fed for months. The lovers parted for a total of six times, five resulting with the frantic turn back of Romeo back to the orchard. To every sound that Juliet calls, Romeo flew like the wind like a soldier under command. Like an animal, Romeo climbed the tree at immense speed just for another sweet goodbye kiss from Saint to Pilgrim. Also, Juliet who was the dearest pearl of the capulets, also had unlady-like behaviors. Her hair waved around like a madman, her arms cut through the air like dislocated limbs, and she ran across the orchard wall a couple of times. I expected a scene like Rapunzel, where a princess calls down with a voice that would tame a beast.
There are some corrections that you may do, but it is great pleasure to have my piece of work chosen for such magnificent filming. Great minds think alike, I know you have the talent to elaborate this film to the fullest, where we may reach consensus.

You Dearest,
SP